The character stuff you have is very nice. It not only shows us what the gremlin looks like, but it also gives us a good idea of the characters personality. I think that is important in a gag cartoon where so of it is based off the traits of the main characters and there personalities bouncing off each other. I look forward to seeing the Canadian Hero's personality. If you can get a good contrast between the two characters, it will be a lot easier to come up with some funny gags. Keep it up!
I think the film reel should be shorter. You should just use it to set up your story. The story really starts at the end of the film reel. Show more of the build up between the gremlin and the Canadian.
The story really seems to be coming together much better now. As for your boards, I wouldn't worry about making them look nice and clean. Just just the whole thing down right now and clean it up later if you have time.
To kranma: I think it's just long enough, but I'm not finished with what you see here. I should have it up tomorrow sometime but there is more action between the two..
To MrG: I'm now running out of time so for this point on it will just be black and white. It didn't take me that long to do but I agree...
The story is certainly more coherent and the comedy you use is successful. I agree with both Geoff and Kelly on their feedback regarding the film reel section of the short and the drawing quality. I would take out the 1980's reference which is easily the weakest gag at this point - it takes resonance away from the Shatner! You must feel more comfortable with the rougher styles Gav to succeed as a story artist!
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The character stuff you have is very nice. It not only shows us what the gremlin looks like, but it also gives us a good idea of the characters personality. I think that is important in a gag cartoon where so of it is based off the traits of the main characters and there personalities bouncing off each other. I look forward to seeing the Canadian Hero's personality. If you can get a good contrast between the two characters, it will be a lot easier to come up with some funny gags. Keep it up!
I agree and thank you very much I'll keep posting up more..
I think the film reel should be shorter. You should just use it to set up your story. The story really starts at the end of the film reel. Show more of the build up between the gremlin and the Canadian.
The story really seems to be coming together much better now. As for your boards, I wouldn't worry about making them look nice and clean. Just just the whole thing down right now and clean it up later if you have time.
To kranma: I think it's just long enough, but I'm not finished with what you see here. I should have it up tomorrow sometime but there is more action between the two..
To MrG: I'm now running out of time so for this point on it will just be black and white. It didn't take me that long to do but I agree...
The story is certainly more coherent and the comedy you use is successful. I agree with both Geoff and Kelly on their feedback regarding the film reel section of the short and the drawing quality. I would take out the 1980's reference which is easily the weakest gag at this point - it takes resonance away from the Shatner! You must feel more comfortable with the rougher styles Gav to succeed as a story artist!
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