http://www.mediafire.com/?np96u5ix4n768z5
Here is my progress guys. Sorry, as always, that most of it is so rough.
I've only gotten to about line 28 so far I'll be working on it for the next few hours before going to bed any feed back is much appreciated :)
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I think you might be having my same problem, as I dont see a link to your files, or even an address to copy.
Oh, sorry Jamie I'll fix that D:
Love the pan around when she's materialized. Good work. I suspect when he's initially running you are violating the screen directions of right to left we've agreed upon. This is prior to them running away together, so it may be ok, I would err on the side of clarity. I understand that you may be doing this because of the blocking of the run-up to the bars. Perhaps if when he skids to a stop we cut to a midshot of him front facing that trucks back to show the bars in front of him? Then he can get up and run to the right while the guards run up behind him? that might make it a little more cinematic while maintaining the movement we agreed upon.
I like the slide under the door, the run up to it I thought was less clear, it almost looks like he's pitching. I kinda like how the flower blows up like a jiffy-pop stovetop popcorn tin.
When they are playing around the columns I wonder if we lose track of where they are just prior to when she pops up on the right?
Love your rendering
Thanks Jamie I'll try to change the beginning so he continues running from right to left. And I'll work on the gesture of the slide xD
About the columns... do you think it shouldn't be such a long shot? Or is it unclear because it's so rough? It's just supposed to be a pan from right to left tracking their movements um do you have any suggestions for another way to handle it?
Thanks for the timely feedback :)
I thought the unclarity lay in where they were positioned prior to the cut, not that there was a long shot prior to it. I may be talking out of my, ahem, on this, so don't necessarily do a bunch of work just based on what I'm saying, lets see if teammates and directors/producers/teachers disagree first. They probably justifiably do.
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